Wednesday, July 2, 2008

High on Haiku

Some attempts by yours truly. My motto is:

We shall invent new forms of pain, and then find ways of inflicting them upon the world.

1.
Dark, damp, humid night;
A drop trickles down the neck.
Red! Equality!


2.
House on fire, flames leap,
Smouldering, scorching, savage.
Intertwined bodies.


The word haiku reminds me of the 90s song 'Hai huku hai huku hai hai...'. :D Makes me want to write a haiku using that.

Can you get any more pathetic than this? Try in the comments section.

7 comments:

Akhil Gupta said...

Trauma-drama-hope-ecstasy,
Something within, of a mystic,
A Hopelessly Optimistic!

Unknown said...

Not attempting.

But the second one was quite nice.

Butterfly said...

Bathe hands in the blood of a person slain by oneself, show to the world that one has won the battle with the slain person.

R said...

Will never try :D
But as woodie said... I like the 1st one more. You know the works. Ahem.

Swetank Gupta said...

Akhil
Hey, great to finally have you here on this blog. :) And thanks for such a lovely Haiku. If I may be so rude as to point out, though, that a Haiku follows the 5-7-5 syllable rule for its three lines. This, of course, is something that I should have written in the post itself. But a lovely, lovely thought. :)

Sayandi
Thanks! I think you'll quite like the first one too, now, given that I've edited the post. :)

Sinjini
Whoa! Those are some really strong words. What made you write such a thing (besides the normal anguish and frustration that you and I go through at every stage of life over the apathy and the disinterest shown by those around us towards everything of consequence)?

Rohit
You must attempt! You must, you must!

Anonymous said...

i perform surgery,
patient bleeds to death
o my bloody god and fuck


haiku is bloody hopeless
some years ago in one of the readers digests there were a collection of haiku poems as error messages on windows
was really funny

That Girl said...

I try and I try
To appreciate haikus
But they just amuse

- me

That's a haiku+1!
I've read some classic ones and they're lovely, all cherry blossoms and shrine incense, but most other haikus (not to mention trying to write one) just amuse me!